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~~Sir Francis Bacon

Monday, April 23, 2012

Indicators (w/ examples)

Dress-ups are bolded and underlined

(1) Openers (& the vss) are numbered within parenthesis, bolded, and highlighted with yellow

(Q-DEC 1)  DECs are named within parenthesis, bolded, and highlighted with yellow

Vocabulary words are highlighted in light blue.


Here are examples of proper indications of: 
dress-ups
openers
DECs 
M3s
OWLs
vocabulary words 
 
          As everyone knows, cats are fatally dangerous to little mouselings.  The addition of felines to their barn necessitated an emergency mouse meeting.  Dealing with the vexing threat of the bloodthirsty cats was the first point of order for the anxious mice.  (Q-DEC1) How could they outsmart the cats? (ALLIT)The mice needed a strategically smart solution.  They had held a meeting like this once before when the farmer had rescued a momma cat and made her a little bed in the barn. Luckily, that was situation was remedied when the cat's owner was contacted a day later.  It had been a traumatic day for the mouse community that resided in the barn. Once again the rodents found themselves trying to think of a way to foil their natural enemy.  Their first idea was to place a GPS signal in the cat’s food so they could at least track the tabby. It almost worked.  The cat had consumed every morsel in its bowl. (M3-v)Excitedly, the mice meowed, purred, and high-fived each other. So happy were they that the cat had finished the food that they did not realize the flaw in their plan.  The GPS was in the feline’s stomach and their plan was working, or so they thought!  Unfortunately, the signal was drowned out by the cat’s fur!  
(DEC 3) Oy vey!  (DEC 5)Well, if at first you don't succeed; try, try again!
        The next plan was to covertly put cat food in the mousetraps. As they heard the loud snaps of the mousetraps, they began to rejoice until they heard the hound's pitiful, high pitched cries of pain. They discovered the humiliated hound yelping with numerous mousetraps hanging from his red nose.  
         (2)After a few more community meetings, they hatched a new plan. The mice, who all knew how to read and write, put an ad in the paper to sell the kitty. When a pet store owner called about the ad in the paper, the farmer became quite befuddled.  He was confused because he did not know about the classified and since he was such an animal lover, he ended up buying another cat. This is when the trouble doubled for the mice! 
           The rodents decided that they had to resort to scare tactics. To scare the tabbies, the mice borrowed the farmer’s new ATV and tried to chase the cats away. Instead of disposing of the cats, they lost control and ended disposing of the ATV by accidentally driving it into the lake. Next, they tried sending fake notes to the cats to make them fight, but the playful pussycats did not know how to read. Unfortunately those scathing notes were found and read by the farmer. (EPIPHORA)To this day the farmer is still perplexed and wonders why anyone would leave a note telling him that he has dog breath.  How could he have dog breath? His toothpaste is mint flavored and definitely does not smell like dog breath. Or, does it? The poor farmer brushes his teeth ten times a day now -- with a new toothpaste!
       The furry little animals even tried sedating the cats with a tranquilizer gun that they "borrowed" from the farmer.  (3)Unfortunately, they missed and hit the farmer who took an unexpected nap in the haystack for the rest of the day. (vss)The mice were stumped. If they did not take action they would surely become a cat snack.

Sunday, April 22, 2012

IEW Checklist



The pdf is for live classes. You can print out one per essay.

For online classes, use this template. Copy and paste it under your essay.  

DRESS UPs
who
which
ly
bc
www asia
QA
SV

OPENERs
1
2
3
4
5
6
7

DECs

M3

OWLs

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Here are a two examples of excellent online checklists:

CHECKLIST (Nora)

DRESS-UPS
who P1: who was a farmer P2: who was a Portuguese P3: who is someone that
which P1: which are the same P2: which brought about the P3: which triggered the First 
bc P1: because people discovered that P2: because of competition between P3: because people became addicted
ly P1: originally P2: newly P3: illegally
asia P1: when a man named P2: when a Japanese monk P3: when the Qing Dynasty
QA P1: intricate P2: essential P3: massive
SV P1: uncovered P2: racing P3: surpassed

OPENERS
#1 P1: Because matcha became P2: Because Britain was attempting P3: Because the British East
#2 P1: At first, tea was P2: Over time, the Japanese P3: After the mission, the
#3 P1: Gradually, over hundreds of P2: Early in the Seventeenth P3: Finally, in 1839, a
#4 P1: Gaining popularity with the P2: During the Ming Dynasty P3: Fighting along the Chinese
#5 P1: As a result, a P2: Since tea drinking was P3: As time raced ahead
#6 P1: Matcha was successful, successful, successful. P2: Soon, everyone wanted tea. P3: The undercover trip was successful.
#7 P1: Honored in books and P2: Created because of competition P3: Disguised, he traveled through

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CHECKLIST (Kat)

 DRESS UPs 
who P1:man who stood . . . P2:Robert Fortune who was quite . . . P3:Senator Rikyū, who told
which P1:tea plant which had, of . . . P2:which triggered . . . P3:boat which was filled
ly  P1:commonly as . . . P2:reluctantly . . . P3:eventually
bc  P1:changed because things . . . P2:standing because it . . . P3:grown because of the hard
asia  P1:consumed as a vegetable . . . P2:Hong Kong as a symbol . . . P3:887, when a respectable 
QA  P1:rather stubborn eyes to . . . P2:British were insatiable and . . . P3:acting so dispirited, reluctant
SV  P1:was first cultivated 6000 . . . P2:destroyed, triggering the . . . P3:things to contemplate

OPENERS (SENTENCE STARTER)
#1 P1:Because of its popularity P2:Because of the customer's P3:Because China fought 
#2 P1:In desperation, he chewed P2:At the time, the British P3:After the Japanese monk
#3  P1:Originally consumed as  P2: Presumably, Thorin, who was P3:Initially, Britain paid 
#4  P1:Searching for grains P2:Gloating over their P3:Guarding their profit enviously
#5  P1:As tea spread P2:When Queen Catherine married P3:As soon as I mention this
#6  P1:Surprised are you? P2:How very rude of them! P3:Alright, let us begin.
#7  P1:Frightened of people P2:Weakened by the drugs P3:Undaunted by the labor
DEC
DEC-Q  P1: Surprised are you? P3: Did you think I would
SIM P2: addicted to it like moss


M3-n P1: landscapes, water, even human 
M3-ed P2: trooped, marched, and paraded
M3-adj: P3: dispirited, reluctant, and resentful

OWL
Metonia P1: horrors-I mean mysteries-of  P2: take-no steal-the plants
Anaphora P3: Stop acting… Stop glaring… Stop muttering