Due March 22 (Fix-Its & Portfolio)

1) Correct two parts of The Little Mermaid Fix-Its (below).

• Make a copy of the Fix-Its.
• Correct your copy in red pencil or ink so that you can remember the corrections you made & contribute to class discussion when we review this work.
• Rewrite the corrected passage in your notebook. Be sure to double-space.
• Vocabulary: Find the bolded vocabulary words. Look each word up in a dictionary, and then write the definition that best fits the context. Include part of speech and a sentence for each word.

2) Update your portfolio and bring it to class.

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Fix-It: The Little Mermaid Student Editing Checklist   

•  Vocabulary: Find the bolded vocabulary word. Look it up in a dictionary, and then write the definition that best fits the context.
•  Indent? Decide if each passage needs to be indented.
•  Capitalization: Check for proper capitalization.
•  Punctuation: Check for proper quotation marks and end marks.
•  Fragments: Watch for incomplete sentences.
•  Correct use of coordinating conjunctions (cc): avoid using cc’s to string together sentences; avoid starting sentences with a cc.
•  Correct use of who/which and who/whom
•  Commas: Correct comma errors. Some are missing; some are not needed.
•  Apostrophes: Correct apostrophe (’) errors.
•  Agreement: Check for subject/verb or noun/pronoun agreement.
•  Verb Tense: Check for consistency in verb tense (past or present).
•  Numbers: Spell out numbers written as one or two words.
•  Spelling: Watch for the correct spelling of common words.
•  Tricky words: Correct misuse of tricky words, homophones, contractions, and possessives.
•  Underline Dress-ups: “-ly” adverb, quality adjective, strong verb, adverb clause (www.asia.buwu: when, while, where, as, since, if, although, because, until, whereas, unless), who/which.
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  Mark Sentence Openers with numbers: 
  [2] Prepositional openers
  [3] “-ly” adverbial openers
  [4] “-ing” openers
  [5] adverb clause AKA: asia openers
  [6] V.S.S., or Very Short Sentence
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  The Little Mermaid part 1
  Correct any punctuation, spelling, capitalization, and general grammatical errors. Special notes for these sentences:
  
  
  

  • Be sure the subject and verb agree. Review singular and plural verbs (Jon loves; they love) and explain how it can be tricky sometimes to choose the correct one.
    
  • Watch out when using superlatives (-er, -est, most). It is appropriate to use most when the next word is three syllables (i.e., beautiful). However, for shorter words such as pretty or nice, use –er or –est instead of most. Never combine most with an –er or –est.
    
    Part 1
    Far out in the ocean where the water is as blue as the most stunning cornflower and as clear as crystal it is very deep—so deep indeed that no cable could fathom it.
    
    Many, church steeples, piled one upon another, would not reach from the ground beneath too the surface of the water above, in that place, dwells the Sea King, and his aquatic subjects.
    
    We must not imagine that there is nothing at the bottom of the sea but bare, yellow sand no indeed the most remarkable plants grow their. The leaves and stems of which are so pliant that the most slight agitation of the water causes them to stir like they had life
    
    Fish both large and small glide between the branches, as birds fly between the trees here upon land. In the most deepest spot of all stands the castle of the sea king, and it’s walls are built of coral and the long gothic windows are of the clearest amber.
    
    
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    The Little Mermaid part 2

    Correct any punctuation, spelling, capitalization, and general grammatical errors. Special notes for these sentences:

    • Go here to learn how to use lie versus lay. Lay is something you do to something else: Lay the book on the table. Lie is something you do to yourself: Lie down on the couch. It gets tricky with the past tenses: the past tense of lay is laid; the past tense of lie is lay! 
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  Part 2
  Splendidly the roof is formed of shells which open and close as the water flows over them, there appearance is magnificent because in each lays a glittering pearl fit for the diadem of a queen.
  
  
  For many years the sea king had been a widower so his aged mother kept house for him she deserved very great praise especially for her nurturance of the little sea-princess’s her granddaughters.
  
  
  Although, all six were comely children the younger were the most striking of them all her skin was as delicate as a rose leaf, and her eyes as blue as the deepest sea, like all the others she had no feet and her body ended in a fish’s tail.
  
  
  throughout the day they frolicked in the palatial halls of the castle, fish swam in threw the large amber windows right up to the princess’s where they nibbled from the mermaids hands, and allowed themselves to be stroked.
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