Due September 5 (SRA re-write, FI 3&4, vocab)

WHAT'S DUE:
FIX ITs weeks 3 & 4
SRA re-write  

Remember, your assignment is to take a very mundane story and make it interesting!  You have artistic license to make bold changes, but retain enough of the original story to help us recognize it.
Your goal is to go from boring to amazing!

Some of the required "tools" for this endeavor:

STAY AWAY FROM DIALOGUE (Use it only when essential)

NO BANNED WORDS
Replace all banned words with better words even it that means changing whole sentences.
These are the banned words:
go            pretty
get           nice
give         big
say          good
see          like
come
eat

NO CONTRACTIONS

DRESS-UPS
INDICATE ONE of each required dress-up and (if applicable) required opener. You can definitely include more than one of each dress-up and opener, but INDICATE your best ones. Remember to include these on your checklist.

VARSITY        JR. VARSITY          NOVICE
ly                     ly                             ly
w/w                 w/w
bc                    bc                           bc
asia
QA                  QA                          QA
SV                  SV                          SV

OPENERS
# 2
# 3
# 6                # 6

CORRECTLY INDICATE ONE OF EACH DRESS UP & OPENER (as it applies to you)

STAPLE TOGETHER 
(top left) each required piece of your assignment: 
Checklist (on bottom) 
KWO
Rough Draft
Final Essay copy  (on top)
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THINGS TO LOOK FOR IN THE FIX ITs  (weeks 3 & 4)

Quotations

1) Spoken words should be enclosed with quotation marks. These are the rules:

2) Enclose what someone says in quotation marks but not narration that sets up a quotation.

3) When the speaker continues with more than one sentence, do not add close quotes until the end of his speech. Sometimes a speech will cover more than one day’s assignment.

4) Commas and periods go inside closing quotation marks. If narration interrupts a speech, use commas on both sides of the interruption. Commas “hug” the word they follow—that is, they come right next to it—not the word after them.

5) You will need to add quotation marks on before and after the spoken words. Place the closing end mark inside the quotation marks.

Homophones and Usage

When sentences offer a choice of words, circle the correct one. Homophones are words that sound alike but are spelled differently and have different meanings. Usage errors occur when one word is written but a different word is intended, like its and it’s.
These are the two sets of homophones you will see: there/their/they’re and  to/ two/too. 

Who-Which

Dress-ups are ways of dressing up style in writing by using stronger vocabulary or more complex sentence structures. Keep an eye out for who-which clauses, which make sentences more complex. Mark them by writing w-w above the who/whom or which.

Strong Verb

Another dress-up is the strong verb. You will be asked to select the strongest verb in passages. Of the verbs used, which one is more colorful, provides a stronger image or feeling, or is more specific?
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WEEK 3

robin blithely whistled as he strolled along, thinking of maid marian and her bright eyes,
to /two /too
Is this a new topic, speaker, place, or theme? If so, it should be a new paragraph and needs to be indented. Choose the correct homonym in the sentence above. What needs to be capitalized? What else is wrong?

at such times, a young lad’s heart fancifully turns toward the lass whom he loves the best
What needs to be fixed? Be sure to notice and mark the w/w. 

he came suddenly upon fifteen foresters clothed in lincoln green and seated beneath a huge oak tree, feasting and drinking convivially beneath its/it’s branches

Choose the action verb from these sentences that you think is strongest. Which dresses up the sentences best?  
Is this a new topic, speaker, place, or theme? If so, it should be a new paragraph and needs to be indented. 

one of the men in green accosted robin. you there/their/they’re, where are you going with

your quick step shoddy bow and cheap arrows

Choose the action verb from these sentences that you think is strongest. Which dresses up the sentences best? 
Is this a new topic, speaker, place, or theme? If so, it should be a new paragraph and needs to be indented. 

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Adjectives (adj)

Adjectives describe nouns or pronouns and usually come before the noun.  Mark adjectives with adj.

Commas with NDAs

Here is another comma rule. Commas are needed to set off nouns of direct address (NDAs). NDAs are usually names where someone is directly addressed by name, but in this story it is more common to see them as terms like my friend or fair maiden used in place of a name. Look for them in the 4th sentence and set them off with commas.

Homophones and Usage

This week you will be asked to choose the correct term: then (meaning immediately afterward or next) or than (a comparison term). 

Quotations

Sometimes a quotation will continue in another day’s fix. Follow the directions for when to close them off and when to wait.

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WEEK 4

then/than robin grew angry, for no young sprout likes to be taunted with his green years

Robin has more to say, so do not close the quotation until he finishes speaking in the next passage.

he replied, my bow and arrows are as respectable as any man’s. i am off to nottingham to prove it in a champion match

Robin is still speaking, so continue writing where you le o with no quotation marks until the end of this speech.

there/their/they’re i will shoot with other worthy archers for the grand prize: a barrel of top-notch ale and a new bow, to/two/too

TIP: In the passage below, can you find where to add the missing comma?

at this, all laughed aloud and retorted, well boasted fair infant! he will be taking ale with his milk next
Choose the action verb from this week’s sentences that you think is strongest. Which dresses up the sentences best?
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