Due October 8 (Descriptive Essay & FI#7)

Write a descriptive essay using all 5 senses in the description: 

Sight

Sound

Taste

Smell

Touch

• Take time to brainstorm 

• Choose vivid language.

Why use horse when you can choose stallion? Why not use tempestuous instead of violent? Or why not miserly in place of cheap? Such choices form a firmer image in the mind of the reader and often times offer nuanced meanings that serve better one’s purpose.

        • Use your senses!

Remember, if you are describing something, you need to be appealing to the senses of the reader. Explain how the thing smelled, felt, sounded, tasted, and/or looked. Embellish the moment with senses.

For example, a strong paragraph about a trip to the zoo will include not only details about what animals the narrator saw, but also details about what the narrator smelled, felt, heard, and touched. These details help transport the reader to the zoo and establish a deeper connection with the writer. 

Another example: a descriptive paragraph about a busy household could include mostly details that deal with sounds. This allows the reader to focus on a sense and experience a familiar setting in a different way.

       • What were you thinking?!

If you can also describe emotions or feelings related to your topic, you will connect with the reader on a deeper level. Many have felt crushing loss in their lives, or ecstatic joy, or mild complacency. Tap into this emotional reservoir in order to achieve your full descriptive potential.

 

1)  Descriptive Essay

ly,  ww,  b/c,  asia,  SV,  QA
Opener #2 (prep)
Topic/Clincher should reflect, repeat, or reiterate
No banned words

Always be prepared to read your essay to the class.
2)  Staple KWO, Rough Draft, & Checklist to your essay
3)  Frog Prince Fix Its #7 (found below)
4)  Vocabulary assignment

1)  Descriptive Essay

ly,  ww,  b/c,  asia,  SV,  QA
Openers #2 (prep) and #3 (ly)
Topic/Clincher should reflect, repeat, or reiterate
No banned words

Always be prepared to read your essay to the class. 2)  Staple KWO, Rough Draft, & Checklist to your essay
3)  Frog Prince Fix Its #7  (found below)  
4)  Vocabulary assignment

1)  Descriptive Essay

ly,  ww,  b/c,  asia,  SV,  QA
Openers #2 (prep) and #3 (ly) and #4 (ing) and #6 (vss), 
Decs: (MET) and (SIM) and (ALLIT)
Topic/Clincher should reflect, repeat, or reiterate
No banned words

Always be prepared to read your essay to the class.
2)  Staple your KWO, Checklist, and @ least 1 draft to your final-copy essay
3)  Frog Prince Fix Its #7
4) Vocabulary assignment

Fix Its: 

• Its vs. it’s. Its is a possessive pronoun (like his) while it’s is a contraction standing for it is.  
• Some fragments are legal when used in casual conversations.  

• Be careful not to overuse the word and to link main clauses.   
• Introduce the #6 V.S.S. (Very Short Sentence) opener. See the Appendix page A-5.  

Week 7  

 

 “Sweet” Princess Dorinda responded not noticing her fathers grimace. “Its like nice enough outside you know. Might be a like cool idea.” “Precisely.” What else could he say to such twaddle  

  

Beyond the imperial patio Princess Dorinda meandered aimlessly through the stately gardens tossing her ball up up up yet again, and catching it repeatedly with slick confidence.  

  

At the corner of the well however a most regrettable event transpired. Up went her golden ball, then down with a splash, because she failed to catch it the heavy orb sinked to the bottom of the well  

  

Tears flowed copiously and huge drops splashed her golden dress. “Ooh my golden baaall! Dorinda wailed if only I could have my ball back I would bestow a handsome reward on my benefactor!”  

  

twaddle:  
 meandered:  
 transpired:  
 copiously: